FNAF: SB REWRITTEN - CH 20 (AO3 WRITTEN VERSION AVAILABLE!)

[@kiwiqueen138]

I can’t believe we’re already at chapter 20, I’m getting so excited for the next few chapters, I can’t wait to show you all what happens :D Link to written version: archiveofourown.org/works/45445291?view_full_work=true (Currently updated with today’s chapter!) Link to next episode: kzbin.info/www/bejne/mGHWlJJpaM2ghJI Link to previous episode: kzbin.info/www/bejne/iJDUfJuXZpxrrLM Link to full playlist: kzbin.info/aero/PLKMzqZUiHWUjzZj0jfJym1CTORp4rdEDD

[@icyferaligatr9908]

Oh my god this part was so good. The absolute tense moments on the bridge with the rescue was top notch and the final boss approachs. But my favorite parts are the amount of lore and dates we get, further filling the time line. And this reveals so much about the Miller kids and their dynamics, beliefs, and even I believe the first mention of their mother who passed while they were young due to their father's actions. Uuugh its so rich. The other 28 parts make sense cause theres a LOT of shit to wrap up left. But imma call it here, Vanny is trying to revive Bonnie. Thats my theory anyways. Other than that, great part and I wait in anticipation for the other parts to come out

[@ThienNguyen-in6gx]

Ok so at this rate it will take 56 weeks to finish this so that’s 14 months Jesus that a year and 2 months😢 oh well patience is rewarded

[@samuelbaker1416]

Hey can you make a map ( A FAZ-MAP ) to help me understand what the hell is happening, note not a builder approved floor plan just a general sketch of rooms and locations and a sketch of the pizzaplex floor plan My brain is running out of plausible room designs , my brain is melting whether the magnet in this chapter is above or below the bridge, I'm guessing above since Freddy fell on it ( just got up to that bit ) but you know I could be wrong Map please :)

[@jodijoya-clark7741]

The whole connection between Jeremy and the Glamrocks almost reminds me of "A Little Princess" story: Miss Minchin gave Sara endless chores for her to do in order to repay her father's promised payment to her. Same is implied here: Jeremy gives high demands to the Glamrocks because his and Vanessa's father spent every last penny to support them instead of his family. Basically, a higher-up makes the current protagonists suffer because of someone else's financial mistakes, seeing them as debts.

[@lithaline1726]

Man, Freddy, Chica, and Moon really are the Gregory Protection Squad right now

[@phantomkapok]

OKAY that last bit with the "Quiet" part has me very unnerved and i'm very worried that it connects to Vanessa's sudden change in attitude to the animatronics *what do you mean Jerry* on another note i love these videos even if i haven't commented on them a lot! the sound effects you make are so good and they boost my happiness listening to these, especially because i'm very distracted and they help me pay attention back to the audio when that happens it's really helpful :D

[@ArtNegative]

Jesus christ, those Scrapped Staff Bot screeches and noises are freaking terrifying, good job!

[@spiritofchaos58]

You know, sometimes you need someone to gently comfort you through your mental breakdown. Sometimes you need your annoying brother to say “girl nobody cares about lazer tag but you, we are GOING TO DIE”. This whole escape was so fun! I love how it’s written; it perfectly gets that sense of tension across, not to mention how horrifying the situation is. I also really like the attention to detail on the different abilities of the animatronics. The stronger but far heavier Chica and Fredy vs the smaller Roxy and Monty, plus Moon’s hook situation; these differences in design clearly impact how they respond to events, and it makes the story feel so detailed. My favorite aspect of this chapter was absolutely the Monty and Roxy interactions. I’m so happy to finally see them getting along, even if it’s mainly because of the life or death situation they’re in. Monty’s bluntness over Roxy’s suicidal level of self loathing was both very sweet AND pretty funny. Zero tact and I love him for it.

[@vdubdesigns6530]

Man both Vanessa and Jeremy are so messed up in their own rights. But that "are you on your period comment" that just made me hate him even more. You made a good bad guy! Seriously you made him so hateable but also gave him a reason behind his bitter feelings and actions. Your writing is so good!!! I always love seeing a new chapter posted

[@KikitheArtCat]

Seriously! I hate the "are you on your period" argument. It has nothing to do with the current conversation!

[@mythicaldrawer7072]

Scrapped Staff Bots: _Grabs Gregory._ Freddy, Chica, and Moon: "So you have chosen... *Death* ." Aw, is Annie a Nickname that Chica gave Roxy? KIWI CONFERMED THAT SOMETHING IS GONNA HAPPEN TO JEREMY ASSHAT! IT BETTER BE A JUST DESSERTS TREATMENT!

[@Whipspider]

Thank you for making this! Not for the stressful events, but for a wonderful story. Goodluck with the next one!

[@cycloneabsol9405]

39:30 This is the second time that Chica has called Roxy "Annie." Hmm...

[@kiwiqueen138]

Since I don’t want to accidentally misdirect anyone in the lore, I’ll just give you the simple answer here: Annie is just Chica’s nickname for Roxanne, because you know, RoxANNE, “Annie”

[@Sapphire864]

Been rewatching these, and I still find it funny that Chica also calls Roxy “Annie” in this rewrite

[@enderniffler628]

WOOOO LETS GOOO!! TIME TO GET OUR HEARTS RIPPED OUT AND TORN APART

[@mythicaldrawer7072]

Like what those Scrap bots did to that other one.

[@lexxblep-groundzero1369]

God I love this episode this episode was so cool I loved everything about it Roxanne Monte chica Freddy Moon Gregory everyone here was so cool even though Gregory didn't do much this episode honestly I loved his addition. And as you said as Freddie and Gregory got closer to each other they've definitely become more of a pair and I'll be honest with you I started crying when I heard that Freddy went into some kind of feral bear mode when Gregory was grabbed by a staff bot and attacked like my eyes were welling with tears dear God this series makes me cry

[@lexxblep-groundzero1369]

Mama bear Freddy mode 31:01 genuinely got to cry out of me

[@lexxblep-groundzero1369]

I feel really bad for the animatronics The fact of Vanessa is trying to stick up for them is so admirable.... It's so sad how Jeremy sees the animatronics they are truly basically humans no wonder they dissociate and feel well bad Jeremy treats them horrible He's a horrible person a horrible boss and the animatronics don't deserve to be treated like this

[@ThienNguyen-in6gx]

Ok so this gives some context as to why he’s horrible to them but that does not give him the right to treat them like Slaves but I can now also see why Jeremy has gone ni contact with Vinny she was actually willing to kill someone to get Monty to work but what’s worse murder or treat six people, (the animatronics) or a random person that does not justify Vanessa’s actions but Jeremy’s is much worse so yes he is most definitely a hypocrite even worse than Vanny if you ask me.

[@Monroecookie24]

(im FINALLY able to catch up with the rewrite, GOODNESS) Episode in nutshell: who needs therapy whe you can force you family menbers to work together with a live of death situation :D! Now seriously i love this episode especially the emails between Jeremy and Vanessa. As much as i hate Jeremy i xan get where he's coming from. For how he sound i supposed he is older for a couple of yeras than Vanessa. Vanessa being a little kid would be draw for the animatronics for confort, but Jeremy who is a little more mature would question it, besides the fact maybe he feel pressured to be "the man of the family" beacuse is established that their father DID care a little more for the animatronics (the episode with moon pov indicates that) so seing your father care more for robots that his real family AND wife will live some scarring. That being said, HE IS STILL AND ASS.

[@GallexyCat]

Ooh, this was so good!! Super interesting! Im loving this story, the voice acting is amazing and the sound effects are super good! Really adds another level of imersion and tension to scenes. Also, I guess Jeremy was a bit right with the emails when he said that Vanessa wouldn't care so much about the animatronics when she spent more time in the office...😅 Seriously tho, this lore is super interesting, I love all the crumbs we get as it's slowly pieced together, good pacing :)

[@Tarpick]

Rip one armed staff bot

[@Dimonds456]

THE TENSION OMGGG

[@felipeamezquita7827]

Fuck yea epilogue

[@GodOfFireAndWater]

Oh the mother of me i finally caught up on this series and I love it

[@Alice_The_Person3707]

There are a couple songs that I want to make of this but with my self-insert sort of thing. But I’ve kinda turned it into an entire book series and I’m bad a writing character descriptions soooo yeah I’m kinda dying on the inside. If you have any official character descriptions, can I please use them so I save some time? I won’t be publishing the book, it’s just for me to feel good about myself. Sorry about this lol.

[@whiterabbit3050]

My version of security breach the main villain is vanny and the mimic aka burn trap and glitch trap(mimic is endo skeleton from epilogue tales of the pizzaplex this will be alternate security breach where the mimic is burn trap and and glitch trap is mimic 1 programming was correct)

[@squiddyflip3039]

Oh my gosh how do you make these sound effects-

[@LIZZANIMA1]

Yes! Amazing job

[@mjtubeme]

Im very interested in seeing how Vanessa's motives evolve. And what the big picture is!

[@heavenlyNoomba]

This one was so good❤❤❤

[@Mr.encore]

One question what is project security

[@samuelbaker1416]

I'm just gonna say it I'm having a hard time visualising the environment, I need room designs, layouts, not a detailed map but like a sketch, because the imagination of the whole pizzaplex is strange Kiwi Queen if you get this please I need a faz-map

[@kiwiqueen138]

Okay, I posted a makeshift map on the community tab, so just go there to see it. Sorry, it’s kind of rushed and messy, but I was working on something else, so I don’t want to distract very long from that. Hopefully it helps in visualizing the place! :D

[@samuelbaker1416]

​@@kiwiqueen138 you are the best I really love your rewritten security breach, and I look forward to seeing more from you Again thank you, for the map that is

[@twist_ending7545]

39:33 so is the "annie" thing going to be explained?

[@undeadprincess5726]

I would assume it's off the last part of her name.

[@kiwiqueen138]

It’s just Chica’s nickname for Roxanne, because you know, RoxANNE, “Annie”

[@twist_ending7545]

@@kiwiqueen138 I SHOULD'VE BEEN ABLE TO FIGURE THAT OUT DAMN IT

[@twist_ending7545]

@@kiwiqueen138 anyways, that's super cute. Are they gay?

[@intothewoodsatdark]

@@kiwiqueen138 I want the “ Gregory trauma episode “ so bad right now 😭 like how the hell did that poor kid get stuck inside a trunk? In SUMMER?

[@LittleTree03SF]

I know this is off-topic but I wanted to know what do you think of five nights at Freddy Security Breach Ruin that is coming up

[@kiwiqueen138]

It looks cool, but for my own mental sanity, I *really* hope they don’t mess up again

[@intothewoodsatdark]

@@kiwiqueen138 Poor you 😭

[@intothewoodsatdark]

@@kiwiqueen138 these rewrites for real mean mental drainings for you huh

[@Xmababy]

is it just me or do i kinda miss the SU videos :( ;-;

[@Ra.p2]

YOUR ALSO A FNAF FAN I LOVE FNAF