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[@danielledupreez]

Also, another really important point: You don't have to write about something related to you academic interests . In fact, it's really refreshing when people don't. If you do write about your academics, keep it to a small mention so it's not the whole point of the essay.

[@ShivamPatel-hl9ys]

Can I used detailed writing kinda like an author at the beginning of my essay for the hook

[@GP-uo1mv]

What would you recommend about writing something really personal such as rape?

[@user-zt1ki4vk8w]

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[@MelodyLiuJade]

Summary: 1. No vague references to life change; "realization", "perspective that changed"; without detailing how it happened, which is the most important part. The admissions officer won't 'get' what you're talking about, and have read this essay tons of times already. 2. Retrain theatrics or overdramatization. Generally comes off as unpleasant. Don't go into detail on things that are irrelevant to your message. You're not writing an action/drama novel. Treat the reader as a close friend or adult that you know. Focus on conveying the key aspects of yourself, not conveying your propensity for writing advanced literature.

[@Mykahl1]

Melody Liu these are for real the notes I just wrote down almost WORD for WORD!! Seriously freaky.... 😳

[@KM-wb1yd]

So I just wanted to know: I realize that it’s not great to write about “realization” or whatever but...I had a huge flaw with attitude and ego that made a lot of people not like being around me. But my growth and journey from there helped define who I was and I feel that even though I didn’t like that chapter, it was an important part of my life. Do you think this would work?

[@faizaimazhar]

@@KM-wb1yd definitely, i think you should explain what made you change and how you overcame it as well. it would be meaningful if you could convince the reader that you really have changed and the old you is in the distant past so that they dont question that you may still fall back to those old behavioural patterns

[@joshmakesdrinksandjokes]

this is a really good video and some A1 advice! I think the funny part of it is just how fed up you sound lmao ur just like "pls stop doing this for my sanity ok thx bye"

[@Tipperzzz]

This was actually such good advice and I just realized I made the first mistake you addressed in one of my essays. Thank you! I might be sending in some of my essays in the future!

[@seren512]

Ahh this is so helpful!! Thanks so much for what you do ❤️

[@angelaellis607]

This was super super helpful. I definitely was falling into that trap of the first tip you gave. Thank you for your clarity.

[@WriteYourAcceptance]

Great advice! Don’t write on academics and it may be super refreshing and different. Don’t be vague!

[@tylermarie5219]

what about if you write ab your favorite subject and how you’re going to incorporate it into your future career which will help others?

[@rohamhadidchi1196]

This video is actually really helpful. I thought I had a near perfect essay but I can definitely apply these two points you said and make it a lot better.

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[@joshz9704]

Thank you so much. I originally was going to write my essay like I was narrorating a few events in my life... but when you said tell it like you’re talking to a close friend that makes so much sense, plus it its honestly easier.

[@nicholassterling9037]

I'm currently in the process of writing my essay for my teaching program app, and this was really useful!

[@onlyeatapples3166]

very helpful will probably watch 4 more times before my essay is finished

[@deepitpatil]

Amazing vid!! Great points

[@indiahamilton6040]

Thank you for this❤

[@demonlord4661]

this is tougher than i expected

[@rashidibrahim979]

More than helpful. Thank you

[@kathleens2688]

welp time to overthink

[@jourdandavis9915]

Thanks!

[@donterobinson8890]

Thank you this was helpful

[@keyserthegeyser4031]

Already wrote them but I have to watch to see what I did wrong

[@mrquintonrampagejackson9282]

Hi @Danielle du Preez I have a question. My intended major is real estate in college and I am aware that you do not advise students to write anything related to the major. But I am planning to write an essay about my hobby (building a miniature model and real houses) and how it helped me in personal growth. Do you think this is considered relatable to the major I want to study?

[@kentzeng5183]

Ayyy thanks for the vids!! Could you give a concrete example of using “theatrics”?

[@danielledupreez]

Yeah sure! “I woke up that morning and I knew. I just knew. Today would be the day that my life would change. And since then, nothing has ever been the same.” It’s cool for a fiction novel, but kinda of dissonant with the tone of a personal essay.

[@PolReilly]

I have to write my essay soon. I’m going to start it tonight I think, but I don’t know how to write an essay. How can I write about my experience moving to North Carolina from Ireland when I was 9? There wasn’t really anything spectacular that happened

[@limellama1490]

Hi how are you today? Did you ever figure it out?

[@human.aa.6294]

Definitely going to pay for you to edit my personal statement lollll.

[@rgbk9051]

I'm from Nicaragua and the police killed my 15 year old cousin just because he was in a pacific protest and that changed my perspective of life, so i wanted to write my essay about that including some details of course, but I'm not sure if it's a good idea because a lot of people including my counselor said that i should write about things like my major. What do you think? Should I write about that experience or not? By the way i love your channel, it's really helpful

[@danielledupreez]

Please please please don’t write about your major. That is such bad advice. It comes of as extremely boring 99% of the time. It’s also hard to write a non-vague essay about a shift in perspective, but if you nail that one, its going to be an awesome essay, whereas I have never read an awesome essay that has more than a tangential reference to a major.

[@garrettmason1026]

Id really like to send you my essay for editing do you charge and would i be able to when i start writing it

[@kirstanmeichlle6590]

How long should i spend writing my essay? I want to get my essay submitted whithen the first week of applications opening? do you think thats a good idea?

[@vanillapie8321]

How can I submit my essay to you?

[@dddawdaddawda3104]

i literally don’t have any special stories or anything. Might just only apply to schools without an essay requirement

[@camiloarboleda4423]

I've lived in a few countries over the last couple of years and I've adapted to different cultures. Any ideas on what I should write my essay on? thanksssss

[@mechagear4819]

idk lol

[@ishootstar0]

Do I have to pay the 48 hour fee if I don’t need the essay in two days?

[@blueberrysheets3726]

Hi! How can i send my essay draft to you for editing? Do i have to pay for anything? Thank you in advance! 😊

[@watchenroberts7554]

Hi! can I sent my essay to you for editing? I am applying to Baylor university this year spring semester.

[@cemalbabadag2233]

Hey! First of all thanks a lot for the information. I’m writing my college essays, and I’m sure that I have an impressive background to write on. Could you check my essay too when you have time? Would be so helpful.

[@avatellez6036]

Can I submit an essay to you next year when I’ve finished my junior year?

[@danielledupreez]

Yes, I plan to continue editing essays!

[@jf5184]

Hello! do you think you can help me edit my essays for the UC ? Can I share you them on google docs? This would mean so much to me! -Aspiring UCLA or UCSB student

[@rachael8340]

Hey! Do you still edit essays?

[@ayaabdou9321]

do I have to write a different personal essay for every college I apply to?

[@dancingsun2]

Nope

[@minyi3262]

hi! are you still reading essays?

[@andrewschaber2017]

Small world, I'm applying to unc chapel hill

[@mechagear4819]

did you ever get in?

[@mogo1827]

How can I submit my essay to you ? Also, love your videos a lottt

[@danielledupreez]

Thank you! You can submit at essayedits.org

[@aixael6397]

Hello! Would you be able to edit my essay?

[@xkatielikescookiesxo]

ugh haha I just sent you an essay a few days ago and realized today how not good it is because I had a teacher look it over and she hated it. sorry :(

[@anto4380delaguaridaa]

Hi, I am writing my common app essay and I'm having trouble understanding how free prompt​ 7 is.

[@danielledupreez]

I think the point of the Common App essay having prompts is to remedy the ambiguity that comes with calling it a "personal statement" and to allow some relatively minor degree of greater flexibility in what you can write, but the Common App essay is really just a personal statement. You can write about whatever you want, but it should communicate some essence of you that is both attractive and memorable in a way that speaks to the reader. When I edit Common App essays, I don't pay attention to which prompt the student chose at all, and I'm willing to bet neither does the admissions officer. *The prompts are there to make you feel better. Write about whatever topic you want, as long as it accomplishes the function of the essay.*

[@paigepotvin]

I’m applying to college this year? Can I send you mine once I finish??

[@danielledupreez]

Yes, my website is essayedits.org

[@connerpettit4384]

I low-key regret sending you the first draft of an essay idea I had. I described a realization very vaguely and it was a very awful essay. I apologize, but my new essay is much better. Sorry

[@danielledupreez]

Don't apologize! Your second draft was awesome :D

[@CorbinTinnon]

She’s not mad just disappointed