The Worst Writing I've Encountered: Kylie and Kendall's Sci-Fi Book

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[@DanielGreeneReviews]

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[@michaeleggimann106]

Yay square space. A patron to many of my favorites

[@orcanimal]

Rest assured the KK sisters did as much actual writing on this book as one would be able to credit a keyboard when typing out a grocery list.

[@f0rth3l0v30fchr15t]

I mean, they get all the credit for the way they look when it was plastic surgeons who did all the work, so this is right in their wheelhouse.

[@xidarian]

You'd assume that but why hire such a shitty ghost writer?

[@rubytiger13]

​@@xidarian the bimbos probably used ai ounce they found out all they had to do was mindlessly spread their plastic cheeks and sheet all over their keyboard to get a "novel"

[@Wineoclockbookworm]

​just a wild guess but maybe because they have no taste?

[@rubytiger13]

@@Wineoclockbookworm and no brains

[@nhart5132]

"Don't you know, my family is very, very, very important, therefore I matter." That pretty much says it all... 😂😂😂

[@recon_fpv]

^self-important

[@JamesTullos]

I forgot this book existed. It has a *sequel* too.

[@fearjunkie]

OH GOD.

[@rubytiger13]

​@@fearjunkieAI has gone to far

[@vamsiampolu8438]

I would watch a show where the two of you critique a terrible book

[@cbob213]

@@vamsiampolu8438that’s what this is. Why do people still equate things to old tv shows lol

[@samuelleask1132]

😮😮😮

[@hannahbrennan2131]

These celebrities were so preoccupied with whether they could that they didn't stop to think whether they should.

[@skylark7921]

Honestly maybe invert the quote. They were so focused on it they *should* sell a book, they didn’t stop to wonder if they actually *could* make anything worth reading

[@smuu1996]

@@skylark7921 Eh, those ghost writers sometimes do a good job, sometimes they don't...

[@tomascorona71]

@@hannahbrennan2131 nice reference to doctor Malcolm.

[@rangerstedfast]

Clever girl...

[@aaronharvey5625]

I like to think the sentence cadence is fucked because Kendall would write half a sentence and then pass it to Kylie to finish the sentence. (They definitely had a ghostwriter and did not write a syllable if this book.)

[@rubytiger13]

Probably used AI as even the most brainless of the world can smear their unwashed cheeks across a keyboard and get a novel

[@notyourdad]

@@rubytiger13 Give an AI a short summary for a story and a structure to follow and it will give you a very solid outline. Prompt it to write scenes based on that outline and it will produce better work than this.

[@rubytiger13]

@@notyourdad so your saying that anyone with even the lowest functioning down syndrome could use AI to make a better story

[@EvelyntMild]

Their ghost writer was Maya Sloan. Never heard of her, but google says she's an award winning author. I'm convinced that award was for perfect attendence in middle school. Dotdotdot

[@notyourdad]

@@Midori_Seabreeze This book came out a decade ago.

[@samhunt6300]

This certainly raises my confidence that I am not as incompetent as I thought.

[@swordablaze9259]

Ikr! 😂 it's also quite alarming that a professional ghost writer would churn this out. I'm not sure how surprised I am that the publishing house's editor(s) let this through...

[@mEmory______]

It does tge opposite fir me. Am i doing this bad???? 😰

[@KarlKristofferJohnsson]

​@@mEmory______ I'm sure you don't.

[@MrWepx-hy6sn]

Same, like listening to Dan reading this and looking at my own shit actually boosts my morale

[@Slipfish]

@@swordablaze9259 They let it through because they knew the names attached would make it sell more than tens of thousands of well written novels did.

[@skybreaker7966]

Seems like a clear case of "Editor and publisher didn't want to piss off celebrities"

[@thecrispymaster]

More likely a case of "we're going to pay our ghost writer so little that they'll have to put the whole thing together in two weeks to make in any way economically viable for them".

[@takanara7]

It's more like "This is guaranteed to sell regardless of quality so why bother spending money editing?"

[@HelloFutureMe]

I think the most I've done is about 46 hours. I know I've never broken 50. But yeah, it's weird to feel c o g n i t i v e b r e a k d o w n in real time

[@chrisnorris1987]

In the Ultrarunning community, there are people hitting well over 100 hours at last man standing races, and other long format races. I've raced 60+ hours a couple of times and can confirm it's very psychedelic. Reality fades to waking dreams.

[@EvelyntMild]

I hit about 72 hours once. The shadow people seemed nice enough, but I could never quite hear what they were saying...dotdotdot

[@AndrewThoesen]

I've done 43 hours without sleep and it is indeed trippy. Would not recommend.

[@meikusje]

​@@chrisnorris1987 I watched a video a while back of someone doing an ultra marathon and he had a 'spotter' (can't recall exactly what it was called, but someone who ran with him for bits at a time). At some point near the end, he would just be asking the spotter 'are you seeing that too?', 'is this really there?' and other stuff like that. It's a wild 'hobby', that's for sure!

[@kamranm946]

@@chrisnorris1987 some ultrarunner (I think Courtney Dauwalter?) made a shirt with pictures of a bunch of her hallucinations, but I can't find it now

[@drewtheunspoken3988]

They are genuine inspirations! They have shown that you don't need skill or talent to get your novel published. You just have to be famous and have lots of money.

[@JoeAuerbach]

Not entirely true. You can self publish without talent OR fame. I certainly did it!

[@rubytiger13]

And with AI all you have to do is spread your unwashed cheeks and render your keyboard brown to get a novel of this calliber

[@drewtheunspoken3988]

@@JoeAuerbach I haven't read your work, but I'd be willing to bet it's 10X's better than the overpriced toilet paper those girls put out.

[@swordablaze9259]

Yeah, it's either talent or already famous that trads seem to go for. The famous don't have to be talented - just bring an almost guarenteed audience to the table. Self publishing is an entirely different game and more or less anyone can publish this way.

[@AkaSora96]

Hell, you don't even need to actually write it

[@archaeologydad3761]

8:44 can confirm this is a conversation you would have with your Uber driver in Boston while driving past a construction site. "Yeah, you hear 'bout that guy got killed here last week? Ton of bricks fell on him, killed instantly"

[@WankiTank]

I read that in Bill Burr's voice (thank you auto correct for changing it into bill butt)

[@DenDave_]

Well, of all people that could've written a sci-fi novel, these two surely are the last i would ever have expected it from.

[@billyalarie929]

Well, you were right!

[@pRahvi0]

Evidently, they were about the last who ever should have.

[@jamesmacleod9382]

Hell is freezing over.

[@siisti81]

nah cuz they still haven't, so you're good

[@IAteFire]

They couldn’t do it, which is why they hired a ghostwriter to do it for them!

[@JESSEverything]

72 hours? If I miss sleep one night I feel like an absolute crackhead.

[@tait4508]

The drop in quality from the prologue (which wasn't terrible) to the actual chapters (which were quite terrible) is staggering.

[@WankiTank]

same thought! I was like, oh but... this is entertaining. but man, the middle chapter.

[@robwoodring9437]

Those girls' literacy was formed in the texting age. You know their editor spent a 40-hour week just red-lining all the mistaken uses of there/their/they're. The second full week was devoted only to making sure the book HAD punctuation.

[@Nasser851000]

This book makes Wizard'sFirst Rule look like Memory of Light 😆

[@dndn-sc7qg]

Lol. Tbf I don't think first rule is that bad, I recently read it and found it to be ok.

[@xidarian]

I don't think wizards first rule is that badly written it's just ham handedly misogynistic and gross.

[@jackwriter1908]

​@@xidarian i mean you could consider these qualities as bad, if you don't like reading that kind of thing...

[@mpnothanks]

Goodkind did seem like a massive tool, but I did end up finishing the last of the 26 books last month and I found it entertaining enough. I had the good fortune of reading that first before Wheel of Time, which I’m on now.

[@JC-qp8hj]

@@mpnothanksit was entertaining when I was 15. I remember thinking Temple of the Winds was awesome. But now that I’ve read a lot more I can see just how derivative Goodkind was to the point of almost outright stealing. Plus his derision of the fantasy genre and his Ayn Rand love letters are so obvious that it’s bad now looking back as an adult. It’s well-written prose wise but I agree with all of Daniel’s points about Wizards First Rule and it doesn’t really change throughout the series that I remember. Tbf I stopped after book 9 though

[@MasterHigure]

Each sentence has exactly six words. This makes the book quite monotonous. Reading out loud would catch it. But if you don't you don't. Then you're stuck with this shit. Like reading bullet points off slides. The same cadence all the time. Not a single hint of variation. It gets boring after a while. Sounds like a constant sine wave. You wish they did something else. Made some music with their language. But no, we can't have that. You get six words per sentence. No more, no less, always six. Books shouldn't be written like this. But sadly they are some times. It's very very very very bad.

[@Sweetheartstoryreviews]

@@MasterHigure The fact that you managed that was impressive. See? I couldn't even do it.

[@MasterHigure]

@@Sweetheartstoryreviews It did take quite some effort. But you get used to it.

[@generalbradley6421]

Lmaoo

[@Verdictus13]

As someone who was once up for a week straight without chemical assistance, can confirm you start to hallucinate a couple days in. Can not recommend.

[@dewed1487]

Go on, give us some stories!

[@Raikeran]

what happened?

[@swordablaze9259]

Woah! What happened? How and why were you up so long?

[@pippaschroeder9660]

Dang hope your taking care of yourself and getting the sleep you need now

[@skoogproductions7497]

It reads like they dictated the book but when their co-writer tried to expand upon their thoughts they got offended and stopped them 😂

[@Liesmith424]

This video expanded my eyeballs.

[@eire3339]

It's like they listened to Red Rising and said "I can do that." But my mamma always said to say something nice. So, books like this make me respect actual authors even more.

[@Johngradycole]

@@eire3339 haha I appreciate this

[@drummerguy438]

I couldn’t have asked for a bigger confidence boost in my own writing. Thank you for suffering through this

[@lordphinix3]

I hope my writing isnt this bad, but I really worry it is. At least its not published.

[@mittag983]

Mine is worse lmao it's so full and makes zero sense if writing is fun to you keep on 😂

[@recon_fpv]

The trick is keep writing. It'll continue to suck, but eventually you may do something great after a few years.

[@meikusje]

It doesn't matter if it's bad, as long as you're working on improving. Very few people start out good. Writing is a skill, and like any skill, it takes practice and repetition to get better at it. Just keep writing, let people read your stuff, and be open to constructive criticism.

[@nathanhall9345]

The thing that baffles me is the co-author. Because if this was just them, I get it. It absolutely reads like a first story. Ask any author published today, and the first thing they wrote reads like this, or worse. I shudder to think of my first book being seen by anyone, ever. But most people spend a good 5-10 years learning before we actually publish anything. Most of us face adversity and failure and rejection. We persist. And that hones us. Now imagine being guaranteed a deal on the very first thing you write, because it will sell. Skipping the line. And in the process, hobbling yourself.

[@jackwriter1908]

_Andrew could see Blood streaming from his face and even worse, an eye missing._ You can feel how they planned on putting a dramatic *dum dum duuuuum* into it. I don't know why, but that sentence sounds so bad 😂

[@TheInfamousRoo]

Maybe cause it sounds like his attention was drawn first to the blood rather than the gaping hole in the dudes face?

[@TheHonourableFool]

It's the "Andrew could see" which is a common writing mistake among new writers. The writer wants to reinforce that you are perceiving things through the character, but instead makes an active scene passive by distancing us from the moment. Andrew can turn at the commotion and see one of his workers stumbling forward. "Blood was streaming from his face and his eye was missing." Further rewording would make it more visceral for the audience, but even with this minor edit you get a much stronger reaction. Something their ghost writer should have known to correct if she was any good, or else they just controlled what she wrote too tightly. That's all I can imagine.

[@TheInfamousRoo]

@@TheHonourableFool its also possible it was on a horrifically short schedule so the ghost writer was basically writing at sanderson pacing with no time to go back and clean it up

[@TheHonourableFool]

@@TheInfamousRoo also very true! I hesitate to lay any blame on her, considering the egos she had to work with.

[@meikusje]

​@@TheHonourableFool even just splitting the sentence into two would make it better. 'Andrew could see blood streaming from his face. Even worse, an eye was missing.' The way the sentence is written in the original makes it sound like a 'and then, and then' situation.

[@rvantong]

Who needs alcohol? Apparently this book has the same effect on your brain as a gallon of tequila

[@redvalkyrie84]

There is a reason that sleep deprivation is used to torture people. AND why they tell new mothers to not throw their babies - lack of sleep makes you a completely different person.

[@perteadsf4914]

If they were like "Hey, we're beginning writers so don't expect anything from this book." it would all be fine. But no, this was marketed as an actually publishing-worthy book. No. Just No.

[@swordablaze9259]

"First drafts are meant to suck" - this is commom advice in the writing community. But you're not supposed to publish that without edits... 😆

[@RubenRodriguez-co9jx]

Come on Daniel, I can't believe you've never felt your eyeballs expand. You're missing out.

[@takanara7]

Sounds painful.

[@SammieMousie]

I'm with you on drinking. The older I get the less it appeals to me and it never really appealed to me to begin with. Also Kudos to you for even trying to read the book. I wouldn't have bothered.

[@Silmarien_]

Daniel, I had a depressing day today, I was very sad and crying, and nothing could give me joy. You can’t imagine how much this video has lifted my mood! I began to smile and laugh at the sounds of your contagious laughter! From the bottom of my heart, thank you 🤍

[@julio726]

This was so incredibly hard to follow. I can’t imagine the sort of torture people underwent to finish.

[@Kim_Miller]

This was pretty painful to listen to. But it reminded me of something else. Twenty years ago a group of authors got together to write a collaborative novel that was so bad it would be unpublishable. They took turns filling in chapters without reference to the previous one, resulting in characters changing from one page to the next, plot points disappearing, and more. It was called Atlanta Nights, and you can find it easily these days. They submitted it to a vanity publisher who advertised as only accepting high quality manuscripts. It was accepted without question. Then the writers pointed out the reality and the publisher had to back track very quickly. It was then published on Lulu under the author name, Travis Tea. Chase up the Wiki page on it, it's a total scream to read. It's a bad book written by experts.

[@Idontcare5225]

"We're approaching some dialogue" should NOT be a sentence a reader has to utter aloud or even deign to think while reading. Lordy...

[@GreyMarlfox]

It sounds like they wrote lines then went back in with a thesaurus to try and "fancy" it up. Stuff like expanding eyeballs instead of something like eyes going wide in shock.

[@takanara7]

I don't think it was a thesaurus

[@deedaceopondo3520]

And I quote: 'you built this empire but...YEEET!'

[@robinblake7845]

Every time Daniel read the name Longhorn, all I could think was Foghorn Leghorn. So, I kept imagining this mentor character as a giant rooster. I can't decide if this made the story better or worse.

[@rhonwenbaker2448]

1) Can you imagine being the editor on this? 2) I'm morbidly curious as to whether this... prose?... reflects their irl thoughts. --- edt: oh, yes, the sleep thing. Going without for multiple days will leave lasting psychological damage and can actually lead to psychosis iirc.

[@avsambart]

I get delirious every time I fly home. The flights take 18-20 hours and I can't sleep when I travel so in total I'm always up for over a day and I am always loopy towards the end.

[@peaceofcrap]

Daniel thanks for casually repping the choice to stay dry. Makes me happy.

[@calebwright2111]

Some of this writing reminds of Charlie's political speech he wrote for Dennis on always sunny 😂

[@LightningRaven42]

"Hello, fellow american. This you should vote. Me! I leave power good. Thank you, thank you. If you vote me, I'm hot.Taxes, they will be lower, son. The democratic vote for me, is right thing to do Philadelphia. So do!"

[@inscendo8397]

Best comment 😂😂😂😂

[@lethentucker]

My eyeballs have been expanding this entire video, and I'm out of breath with some tears on my cheek. 😂

[@lovefromshirley]

It sounds like it was written like they thought they would get a tv adaptation, that's the only explanation for these strange scene breaks

[@mischarowe]

Daniel: "don't read this book" Me: "10 steps ahead of you" Was never going to.🤣

[@rad4924]

The only thing I can think of to make this book more nightmarish would be if it included a foreword by Terry Goodkind.

[@JamesLiv17]

"I so vividly understand the artistry of writing right now" 🤣

[@caitbeck100]

So the book was written in 2014. I think that means they were 17 and 19? I mean that abomination has no business being published but they were young so that can explain why it was so bad.

[@katelinmize8023]

This is written like it's a middle schoolers book report summarizing what happened in a different book

[@siosinsin7305]

After everything you read i still have no idea what's happening in any of the scenes. Thats honestly a SKILL.

[@ladyjatheist2763]

did 104 hours on a dare at 21 yrs old... was beyond delirious. Slept for 2 days afterward.

[@Persewna4]

That was painful, I can only imagine how much moreso it was to have to actually read it. I think I understand feeling angry about the book, that something that horrendous, that offensive to actual writers was allowed to go to print on the strength of their celebrity alone! It's an actual insult to anyone and everyone who loves the written word.

[@yusufkadar]

This reminds me of those pictures that seem normal at first but, when you actually look at them, you can't identify a single object. Like, I know these are English words that have meaning, but I don't understand any of it.

[@su_shadow9326]

They brought us crap, you turned it into laughter. Thank you Daniel, thank you.

[@Marco_Onyxheart]

This prose is so bad, I cannot process the text at all. And I'm not even dyslexic. And am listening to Daniel read it.

[@Rockblue01]

Prologue: C- for decent first and nice thought in last sentence

[@vamsiampolu8438]

20:28 when you want to focus on something in the distance you narrow your eyes not dilate them. Dilated eyes may represent a lack of focus.

[@IlseMulAuthor]

Thank you for this review and for saving us from this monstrosity! I will never read this book. And I foresee I probably won't be reading any books written by Maya Sloan either....

[@HGPrime]

It's interesting to watch as you go from curious, to amused, baffled, then pissed off as you continue. But if where one of their fans I wouldn't feel like they thought I was the "best" if they offered me that garbage.

[@tiredcrazyman21]

Im a vision technician, and if your eyeballs are EXPANDING, then you are having some serious issues.

[@ladyjatheist2763]

my schadenfreude is in ecstasy knowing they are horrible writers... and I am disgusted that they will undoubtedly make money from it. Absolutely sickening.

[@srely3786]

Unfortunately, you can function without sleep for a long time, but it is definitely not safe or recommended. After having both my babies (2 years apart), I was unable to sleep for 5 days straight, due to them waking and crying to be fed just as I was about to fall sleep and also due to the new mom hormones racing through my body that made me so alert and wired and waiting to hear them wake up. Do not recommend and I could not have driven a car or left the house to do anything - I was a zombie. I did, thankfully get 3-5 hours of sleep on the fifth day after both births.

[@vestofholding]

Rebels: City of Indra: The book that can give you sleep deprivation symptoms in record time.

[@skeletonkeybooks]

I first heard of this book when it won a Green Slime Award at Bubonicon. (Yes, that's a convention named after a plague.)

[@hannahpurnell2002]

Never has a video been so perfectly timed for the end of a work day 🍷

[@MeghanReads]

Well, this was the motivation I needed to try writing something. Coz my grocery lists read better than this

[@stephenoran2019]

Somehow, I don't really find this surprising. Note the absence of any degree of surprise on my face! Thanks for this! (Sorry you had to endure the reading to protect us)!

[@TheBeardedBookBeast]

Oh boy this was so fun. That must have been terrible to read, but it was enjoyable to hear you read it and break it down😂.

[@rzuue]

18:15 it's written like my internship report from when I was in university. Like, it's completely missing any thoughts or feelings of the character.

[@kaleidokai11]

the longest i went without sleep was around five and a half days but it was also triggered by a manic episode and i was very much hallucinating. it was really bad you wouldn’t just be tired you go a little crazy, i couldn’t even force myself to go to sleep at that point i had to get help from my doctor

[@lasennui]

Been an insomniac my entire life. It's a wild ride of functional humanity on 3 hours of sleep on normal days, 6 on best days ever, and zero on the worst. Favorite time was college. I did end up not sleeping for 4-5 days. The reason I say 4-5 is that I have no memory of the 5th day whatsoever. Day 3 was already fairly mild hallucinations and the last part of the 4th to the end of the 5th is just lost to me. But...I didn't do anything abnormal. I apparently still went to classes, to work, accompanied friends, made jokes, and wrote an incomprehensibly strange yet accurate thesis statement for literary analysis homework that I ended up not using. Mania is a hell of a drug.

[@ritzee13]

When I first read the title I though it was an Indian inspired Scifi because Indra is a prominent indian god. I thought there were ripping off Indian culture, but its still a weird name choice.

[@Finey_S_K]

Since I can't get my hands on The Pepperwood Chronicles, I'll be looking out for this gem instead.

[@SlothLinn]

Secret tunneeeeeeeeeel, secret tunneeeeeeeeeel

[@JoeAuerbach]

The use of passive voice here is so incredibly weird. Nobody is doing anything, they're just there while it happens.

[@davidbruce482]

I absolutely can't stand present tense in a novel. Chuck Wendig wrote his Star Wars aftermath trilogy in present tense as well, and I had such a hard time slogging through....

[@pRahvi0]

Present tense 3rd person feels like a script for a movie or comic that is yet to be translated into the final form. Present tense 1st person, like this, feels like... I'm not sure... stram of consciousness? A style trending about a century ago and infamously terrible to read.

[@alexm-e4910]

I don’t think I’ve ever made it a full 72 hours of wakefulness 🤔 but once in first year university, my insomnia got so bad I was awake 3 nights through. Falling apart by the end of it, and when I finally did sleep I genuinely don’t remember a: falling asleep b: how I got back to my dorm room or c: collapsing on the floor of said dorm room still fully clothed. I slept for 17 hours straight or thereabouts

[@Angieptsh]

I just read an excerpt from one of Maya Sloan's standalone books and while it's not *quite* as egregious in the repetitive sentence structure... it's pretty close. I wonder if maybe she's a friend who got a book deal 'cause she's friends with the Kardashians.

[@aqup_]

@@Angieptsh wtf even Kardashian's and Jenner's even do dawg? I have never seen them doing anything on the internet that is, like, their "profession."

[@saraphangel6896]

"Arndew" lol

[@Rockblue01]

You’re so nice to listen to, disheveled, I don’t even mind this involuntary free fall into abhorrent emptiness. 😊

[@sandilemlambo5701]

10:25 this is how I feel about The Grace of Kings. And this happened and this happened.

[@jonrosenberg4324]

A. Sorry my dear dishevelled goblin, no I'd never heard of these ladies. (being British, in my mid 50's and not in soap opera style of taste. Yes that is me being a huge snob and no I'm not going to apologise for it.) B. 'This is void of the artistic talent of writing,' that might be the singe greatest one line put down I've ever heard. Bravo sir! C. Having listen to what you've read... Yeah Fahrenheit 451 this drek.

[@juliaforsyth8332]

Brava!

[@quinn0517]

They *could* have paid a writer. It would have been fine. Somebody gets paid, they get the cash grab, and it's maybe a mediocre novel. But no. I just realized someone must have edited this. Multiple people held this book in their hands and thought, "Sure, let's put this out into the world." Sigh.

[@jackwriter1908]

I mean... if I were the editor I would do it, get the money and just wouldn't care how good of a job I did. After all, no-one will say it's the editors fault 😂

[@jatzi1526]

@@jackwriter1908 I mean other editors definitely will. Schilling out shit for money is possibly a way to advance ones career in the publishing world but I'm betting the better method is to just ya know be a good editor.

[@takanara7]

The book is going to sell because of the authors names. Why would a publishing company spend editing something when that editing will have zero influence on sales figures? It's just flushing money down the toilet absolutely no reason. [some kind of sci-fi toilet that won't get clogged on the cotton-linen paper that money is printed on]

[@IlseMulAuthor]

There was an author involved..... safe to say I will never write a book of hers. I mean.....

[@snoopygonewilder]

I forgot this book was a thing. The only reason I know it exists is because I saw it in a used bookstore and saw Jenner on the spine and was confused. That was the first and last time I saw it and thought of its existance. I've never even considered reading this, and I've read some questionable stuff throughout the years, like so bad I'm embarrassed for people to know I read. I would just feel bad for myself reading this.

[@thomaskemp8803]

Legit felt my eyeballs expand when he read that line!

[@coyley72]

When you reading, everything felt like the blurb off the back of the book. Zzz I bet the KKs just AI’d the book.

[@louyou6614]

Yo man , unrelated to the video , but i wanted to ask you about your thoughts about , the winds of winter 2024 talk ? And the powsible wordcon announcement

[@GWins96]

I think one of my favourite moments of this who video was the start when Daniel stated "I don't really like drinking" . . . Well I think THIS "Book" may have caused Daniel to start drinking.

[@starmoalitiny]

5:14 it’s so specific but so true😂😂

[@Goomaster101]

this book gives me a lot confidence, because if something like this can be published, then I can certainly get published.

[@takanara7]

Yeah first become a billionaire makeup and lifestyle mogul, then use your money to publish and promote your book to your fans. [honestly any 'influencer' can write a book and sell it to their followers]

[@p.dutton2476]

Kane? Indra? Lex?! I think somebody watched too much 100 tv show😂 I feel bad for you Daniel this book sounds brutal. I was cringing most of the time, nearly clicked off the video halfway through. Didn't they have a proper developmental editor, beta readers or proofreader?

[@link6080012]

THIS IS EXACTLY WHAT I WAS THINKING! I have only heard the name Indra in one place, and followed by Kane and chips (like the AI for Allie in Season 3).

[@gabbodelaparrawrites]

I remember grabbing this book at Walmart and reading a random page... I had a headache for the next 45 mins.

[@lupolinar]

I went almost 2 days without sleep (Party party) and went directly to work - I was a hazard to me and everyone around me. I could go home, because I did not look well - and this was in my early 20s.

[@Zytharis]

With so much money you'd think they could at least afford a proof reader 😭

[@innocentBystander19]

Every English student shuddering at the passive voice in the sentence “Andrew was killed.” Eww. Way to take something dramatic and suck all the excitement from it.

[@-Chiel]

The cover reminds me of Tahereh Mafi's YA series Shatter me from 2010s. The books all have a similar eye design on their covers. I haven't read that series, but it's quite popular. I think the Jenners or their publishers might have tried to appeal to a similar audience as those books by the cover choice, maybe to try and seem more legit than the writing itself might amount for.

[@WAFFLE_WARRIOR_]

That was literally my first thought when I saw the cover

[@ettuShaggy]

“Kar-Dash-Nee-Jenners” 😂

[@sarahperricone9171]

I would be such a devoted viewer of 'Keeping Up with Cormac' you have no idea

[@ZendikarMage42750]

Given what the book seemed to be doing to you, it seems like a really good idea that you didn't have alcohol for this one, heh heh

[@karigirl34]

16:26 Somehow, this is a ghost writer (Maya Sloan). I guess this goes to show that even large amounts of money couldn’t make up for passion when it comes to fantasy writing. I’m curious to see what this writing (& editing) process was like here. 17:23 My best friend and I used to write stories chapter by chapter back and forth in middle school and they read a lot like this too 😂

[@LightningRaven42]

Given how these people like to threat others, I wouldn't be surprised if they hired the ghost writer for as cheap as possible and didn't work with them whatsoever, and probably didn't pay enough for them to do more than a finished first draft.

[@karigirl34]

@@LightningRaven42 Honestly, I think you’re onto something there. That would absolutely fit the bill.

[@jackwriter1908]

​@@LightningRaven42 I would definetly halfass my job if someone had the money to pay me well, but tries to give me the bare minimum and then (let's be honest that definetly happened) keep demanding changes. And since my name wouldn't be on the cover anyway, I couldn't care less how poorly it is reviewed 😂

[@alec8485]

This might just be Maya Sloan's writing quality. She has 2 books on goodreads where she's listed as the only author, which have a rating of 3.37 and 2.44.