Editing YOUR College Essays | The BEST Essay I've Read So Far

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ElevatEd School

ElevatEd School

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@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool 5 ай бұрын
Over the last three years, we've edited more than 8000+ college essays and helped hundreds of seniors from around the world gain more than 600+ acceptances to top 20 schools. Want your essay professionally edited? Visit: www.elevated.school/editmyessay Where our students got in: www.elevated.school/2024results We recently made a playlist that covers EVERY college essay supplemental question! Check that out here: kzbin.info/aero/PL6kAlDuzWEqZdBiNfVndYm5IZr3uwOtE7
@sumaiyatahsin4707
@sumaiyatahsin4707 Жыл бұрын
These analysis videos are so much better than watching dozens of KZbin tutorials and reading tons of sample essays. Thank you!
@systemloading45
@systemloading45 Жыл бұрын
You don't understand how helpful you are!!!!!!!!!!!!! Your work is soooo appreciated
@bgavd3695
@bgavd3695 Жыл бұрын
Hey, I have a question that if I can use Chatgpt to improve grammar and punctuations.
@VaughnGoehrig
@VaughnGoehrig 2 ай бұрын
Love how you emphasize practical strategies to make general takeaways and repetitive language more specific!
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool Жыл бұрын
Hi friends!! For the next month (until 11/1/23), we’ll be selecting 3 of the commenters on THIS video for a FREE essay review! To qualify, all you have to do is like and reply to this comment with something you learned from this video :) FYI normally, we charge $225 for a professional common app review with feedback from two of our ElevatEd consultants!
@aarohikulkarni8524
@aarohikulkarni8524 Жыл бұрын
Hey! Thank you for this video. I'd say I learnt the importance of analyzing other people's essays. Also, I really liked the tip about the usage of fun verbs, and how it just makes the essay so much more lively. I'd love to get my essay reviewed by you :)
@sarahcarroll520
@sarahcarroll520 Жыл бұрын
This video honestly helped me so much with writing my Nat Merit Finalist app essay. I learned that talking about the process, adding specifics (even if they feel kinda niche), being vulnerable, and talking more about the solution than the problem helps to make all my Common App essays better 😊
@pranavidantuluri1685
@pranavidantuluri1685 Жыл бұрын
This video was super helpful in writing my UNC Chapel Hill supplementals. The specificity was something I was clearly lacking, and this video highlighted that the more specific and personal, the better. This series motivated me a lot to think outside the box when writing my essays and I hope you continue it!
@emilybaraceros4344
@emilybaraceros4344 Жыл бұрын
Thank you so much! for all of your college writing tips! Your video has taught me to watch out for cliches in my essay and to be as descriptive as possible (show don't tell!). Looking forward to watching your next college essay editing video! :)
@aleezacobras
@aleezacobras Жыл бұрын
This video provided me with a reminder that the tone of the essay is really important, and being able to use different word choices to reflect and balance different tones can help an essay stand out.
@Nati-zecherkos
@Nati-zecherkos Жыл бұрын
00:02 Learn how to make your college essays stand out and get into your dream schools. 01:52 The student's mother was diagnosed with breast cancer. 03:35 Gradual transition after witnessing mother's chemotherapy 05:26 Teaching basic survival skills and saving lives 07:15 The student's essay lacks specific details and needs more profound reflection in the conclusion. 09:05 The meaning of life shifted for the speaker from pursuing joy to serving others 11:23 Creating the ultimate chocolate chip cookie experience and sharing it with others. 13:10 The organic chemical reaction between amino acids and reducing sugars creates melanoidin compounds that provide color and flavor to brown foods. 15:09 Baking as an expression of admiration 16:55 Value the process of creating something remarkable 18:31 The essay started off strong but fizzled out towards the end. 20:06 The video discusses the emotional impact and authenticity of a college essay.
@tanvi6033
@tanvi6033 Жыл бұрын
this is by far one of the best series/programs you have implemented- seeing the edits hands on is more helpful than you could ever imagine
@marina3934
@marina3934 Жыл бұрын
This is so so helpful! After watching this, I cut own a few sentences that I didn’t need and elaborated on certain things! Much appreciated!!
@Izzatgold4747
@Izzatgold4747 Жыл бұрын
Hey, I think we can help each other. I need a partner on this. What do you say
@bernardafrifa4587
@bernardafrifa4587 Жыл бұрын
This has really build my confidence to send you my essay and I’m thankful for that
@xinixperla8132
@xinixperla8132 2 ай бұрын
This live edit is super helpful in cutting down unnecessary content and tightening up the overall structure! Great video, Kevin!
@huntertharpe1917
@huntertharpe1917 2 ай бұрын
More great work from Kevin! I especially love how Kevin points out specific places where the student can explain themselves in more detail to create natural transitions!
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool Жыл бұрын
Hi friends! It's happening again! From now until September 28th, we will be reviewing YOUR supplemental and UC essays for free! Send them to essay@elevated.school with the subject line "KZbin Review" for a chance to have your essay analyzed on our channel! If you are comfortable having me workshop your common app essay in a KZbin video, I would be more than happy to do it completely free for you (we will anonymize your names of course!)! 😊😊😊
@analu2821
@analu2821 Жыл бұрын
this is amazingggg thanks
@meeqvin
@meeqvin Жыл бұрын
where i can send commonapp essay?
@orissigra
@orissigra 10 ай бұрын
​@@meeqvin essay@elevated.school broo, he typed that
@deborahgodwin990
@deborahgodwin990 2 ай бұрын
Wow. So this offer isn't available again? I wanted to send in my essay for review.
@arielshih9353
@arielshih9353 2 ай бұрын
Love the essays that were highlighted in this video, as well as the care and depth of analysis that went into the editing!
@LilyRen-y3o
@LilyRen-y3o 2 ай бұрын
Really thorough video! I love how specific Kevin is with these edits, and was impressed by the revised conclusion! This is super helpful :)
@romanoalexa
@romanoalexa 2 ай бұрын
Gems of tips here-- probably one of the easiest to implement is eliminating the extra details and redundant words! The accumulation of those freed up words gives space for perhaps a more powerful sentence elsewhere! Each words counts.
@tanyazilinskas9457
@tanyazilinskas9457 2 ай бұрын
Amazing what a huge difference removing the cliches and unnecessary words makes!
@angThiDiemTrinh
@angThiDiemTrinh 4 ай бұрын
I amm so grateful for your mission, you should be more popular!!! Hope to see more valuable advice from you!!! I really appreciate your dedication and kindness!
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool 4 ай бұрын
Thank you!!!
@chirmidetha4939
@chirmidetha4939 Жыл бұрын
You are amazing. This is what we need. I would love to get my essay reviewed by you.
@KokeAlmaz
@KokeAlmaz 3 ай бұрын
I'm Ethiopian student. I like all the reviews you have made. So helpful🙏
@lornazhen7228
@lornazhen7228 2 ай бұрын
Another great video! The detail in the analysis is fantastic!
@MariaRita-zg9sb
@MariaRita-zg9sb Жыл бұрын
Hello from Brazil! First, I would like to say thank you SO MUCH for this and all your other videos, I'm definitely taking notes! From this video I learned the how to write continously ( don't want to do "The Eureka Problem") and to worry less, I just need to be myself and share my history, but in a unique way. I would love to get my essay reviewed by you, because here in Brazil we use "reais", not dollars, and '"1 real" its 6 dollars, and unfortunately I can't afford that :/ I hope I have this opportunity, and thank you for giving to me and all the students around the world, It means a lot to us who have a big dream waiting to be fulfilled in our hearts :) Yours sincelery, a girl who dreams a lot and its giving her best (or just Maria)
@karenlu6762
@karenlu6762 2 ай бұрын
This is amazing insights! Thank you Kevin!
@elizabethdaley4622
@elizabethdaley4622 Ай бұрын
These videos offer fantastic feedback and insight! I am very impressed and learned a lot just watching this one video.
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool Ай бұрын
Great to hear!
@GabeHoffman-p5m
@GabeHoffman-p5m 2 ай бұрын
Love seeing the live editing play-by-play!
@fozilmamadaliyev7171
@fozilmamadaliyev7171 Жыл бұрын
Thank you, Kevin. We're learning a lot from you. I hope you will do this free editing again soon!
@Ebdnvioqvnonroiwbniow
@Ebdnvioqvnonroiwbniow 2 ай бұрын
This is a great essay, and I loved seeing your edits :D
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool 2 ай бұрын
Thank you so much!!
@HunnidBandJuggs
@HunnidBandJuggs 2 ай бұрын
I love this concept put into action that you are doing!
@adedunnipinheiro3344
@adedunnipinheiro3344 Жыл бұрын
You’re so nice! I appreciate your channel! Thank you
@SammettaWorzie
@SammettaWorzie Жыл бұрын
This video was soo helpful! Thank soo much!
@NuryChavez-e3i
@NuryChavez-e3i 2 ай бұрын
Great insights on how to make conclusions stronger!
@bsimret
@bsimret Жыл бұрын
So helpful to see your editing process! Very helpful as partent to know how to give helpful feedback.
@yea364
@yea364 Жыл бұрын
I’m applying to Northeastern as my ED school. Since they don’t have any supplementals this would help a lot!
@tobalaseoyewusi6199
@tobalaseoyewusi6199 Жыл бұрын
Where have you been all through my college applications? So good.
@Anindolentzelda
@Anindolentzelda 5 ай бұрын
You’re an amazing editor! So talented
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool 5 ай бұрын
Oh thank you!
@sarthak1448
@sarthak1448 Жыл бұрын
Let's get bro to the 1M
@sabeennawaz5830
@sabeennawaz5830 Жыл бұрын
Brilliant!! A lot of learning for everyone
@gobelfury
@gobelfury 5 ай бұрын
Oh my goodness! You're such an amazing editor❤️
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool 5 ай бұрын
Thank you!!
@EmmanuelaEjoga-l3h
@EmmanuelaEjoga-l3h 2 ай бұрын
a timeless video!!
@Darskhan-bz4v
@Darskhan-bz4v 4 ай бұрын
You are amazing. This is what we need.1 would love to get my essay reviewed by you🎉❤
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool 4 ай бұрын
Keep your eyes peeled for updates in the next 2 weeks where we'll be announcing opportunities for FREE essay reviews!
@Darskhan-bz4v
@Darskhan-bz4v 4 ай бұрын
@@elevatedschool I am looking forward to it 😊
@badralbeity4645
@badralbeity4645 Жыл бұрын
You are an absolute legend!!
@AnneFletcher-k9b
@AnneFletcher-k9b 2 ай бұрын
Super helpful, thank you!
@davidbaker8294
@davidbaker8294 5 ай бұрын
Thank you very much!! Very helpful and I havent even started my draft yet!
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool 5 ай бұрын
Glad it was helpful! We'll be doing this series again in the fall!
@SanjarbekNormamatov-f1k
@SanjarbekNormamatov-f1k 3 күн бұрын
Good part of the day sir! could you send the marking criteria/rubric for essays?
@ray1084
@ray1084 Жыл бұрын
this is awesome. hope you release more of these next week!
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool Жыл бұрын
Hi everyone! It's been 2 years since we started this KZbin channel + launched this agency to help kids get into colleges. So far, we've helped more than 70+ students from all across the world and every background imaginable get into every single Ivy League School, Stanford, MIT and more! If you'd like your essay by us, just visit our website! www.elevated.school/editmyessay
@arnavmiranda
@arnavmiranda Жыл бұрын
Hey Kevin! Love the video! Quick question, after watching pretty much every video on your channel I've noticed how you place heavy emphasis on the P/S ratio. However, the second essay you've displayed here, the one you gave an 8 to, doesn't really display much of either a problem or solution. Does this mean that it is possible to draft good essays that don't need to stick to the double problem solution format? Asking because mine is similar to the essay in question here, and I'm a little anxious 😅😅
@KumudKhattar
@KumudKhattar Жыл бұрын
Yes I would like to know this as well. Thank you!!
@MatthewIgoe
@MatthewIgoe 2 ай бұрын
Specificity, specificity, specificity...and no unnecessary repetition :p !
@nabhaf2796
@nabhaf2796 Жыл бұрын
Thank you so so much for your video ❤✨
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool Жыл бұрын
You're so welcome!
@snake_05
@snake_05 Жыл бұрын
Couldn’t have come at a better time 😄
@YilackNovesta
@YilackNovesta 7 ай бұрын
Wow! Such a beautiful lesson
@SandViperJ3000
@SandViperJ3000 2 ай бұрын
Great tips thanks
@Numb3r10ck
@Numb3r10ck 18 күн бұрын
Sweet ❤ reminds me of portal ha…
@KhanhKrafts
@KhanhKrafts Жыл бұрын
I love all you guys do! Your videos are great and really helpful. I love writing and watching these videos has helped me a lot :)
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool Жыл бұрын
Thank you!!
@alisonaldrich648
@alisonaldrich648 4 ай бұрын
Great info. Wondering why you didn’t talk about the frequent use of passive voice in this essay.
@ngwuemeka1838
@ngwuemeka1838 Жыл бұрын
Thank you for this . I was able to cut down a few sentences from my essay 😊
@opensales1499
@opensales1499 3 ай бұрын
Great content. Thank you.
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool 3 ай бұрын
Glad it was helpful!
@helendobbyn8739
@helendobbyn8739 Жыл бұрын
Thanks for the great information
@NahumX-d5k
@NahumX-d5k Жыл бұрын
Thanks for the video!. It saved my life😆😆😆😆
@Sara-gm4qz
@Sara-gm4qz 10 ай бұрын
How do people write like this? I don’t stand a chance 😭
@heloooooDiana
@heloooooDiana 5 ай бұрын
😭😭ikkkkk it's so hard
@PoodleVR
@PoodleVR 5 ай бұрын
funny enough, my mom was diagnosed with breast cancer my sophmore year too. All my grades went down that year and i haven't been sure if i should mention that to colleges to give reason to the drop in grades. I'm worried it will make it look like an excuse though.
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool 5 ай бұрын
You can mention it in the Additional Information section of your application!
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool 5 ай бұрын
Sorry to hear about your Mom :( is she doing alright?
@angiejlho
@angiejlho Жыл бұрын
cant wait!
@melhemhayek1328
@melhemhayek1328 Жыл бұрын
Thanks for the vid!
@lukesanborn
@lukesanborn Жыл бұрын
I ❤ common app essays
@cottencandy8073
@cottencandy8073 5 ай бұрын
Very helpful!
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool 5 ай бұрын
Glad you think so!
@jbabarquez
@jbabarquez Жыл бұрын
WOW. It's a good essay but life doesn't happen in that order, right? That's my struggle now. My life is all over.
@angeliqueordonez5233
@angeliqueordonez5233 11 ай бұрын
Great and helpful video
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool 7 ай бұрын
From now until August 2024, I (Kevin) will offering doing FREE intro calls with students (and parents!) Visit: linktr.ee/elevatedschool Thank you watching our videos! Your support seriously means the world to us!!
@fozilmamadaliyev7171
@fozilmamadaliyev7171 Жыл бұрын
I am wondering if we also can have access to the elevated essay rubric.
@jennykuo4430
@jennykuo4430 Жыл бұрын
So helpful!
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool Жыл бұрын
Glad you think so!
@stevenxiang3632
@stevenxiang3632 Жыл бұрын
great video, it was so helpful! Do you think using quotes in the essay is valid?
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool Жыл бұрын
I typically don't recommend it... but there's an exception to every rule!
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool Жыл бұрын
if you mean quotes from famous people, I'd probably avoid - but if you just mean quotes from characters (like dialogue) that's ok!
@stevenxiang3632
@stevenxiang3632 Жыл бұрын
@@elevatedschool thank you!
@joshuabober9171
@joshuabober9171 Жыл бұрын
Rewriting my essay with only a week left til ED 😅
@abibibiiiiii
@abibibiiiiii Жыл бұрын
Thank you ❤
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool Жыл бұрын
You're welcome 😊
@СамираШангареева-и3ю
@СамираШангареева-и3ю 2 ай бұрын
Hi I was wondering if you guys review essay for New York university?
@qurbanalihussaini123
@qurbanalihussaini123 5 ай бұрын
Thank you so much for all your support! It's my dream to get into a top US college. Could you please let me know what kind of students you are looking to help? Thanks a again ❤
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool 5 ай бұрын
We help all kinds of students - feel free to apply for a scholarship on our website: www.elevated.school/getstarted
@qurbanalihussaini123
@qurbanalihussaini123 5 ай бұрын
@@elevatedschool OK, thanks 😊
@Teen_vibez
@Teen_vibez 2 ай бұрын
This video is super amazing😅, but i feel the essays word count would be more than 650 words😢
@edidiongluke
@edidiongluke 5 ай бұрын
Please do you review for graduate applicants too?
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool 5 ай бұрын
Yes we do!
@davidmasneri3505
@davidmasneri3505 Жыл бұрын
If I deleted the cliche hook, would I keep my opening two sentences or add more?
@diegonunez4085
@diegonunez4085 Жыл бұрын
Ermmm I think one or 2 sentence hooks are good bc they kind of demand the reader to keep looking for answers to your hook yk. Your hook should kind of leave the readers a little bit confused which would result in them lookikg further into your essay to understand the mystery you portrayed in the opening
@veronicasmemories
@veronicasmemories 9 ай бұрын
I appreciate the help (:
@ItungoShunem
@ItungoShunem 4 ай бұрын
Thanks alot.
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool 4 ай бұрын
Most welcome!
@KJ7JHN
@KJ7JHN 2 ай бұрын
KZbin 5C's for conclusion. Close the loop, Conclude, Clarify, Concerns, Consequences.
@KJ7JHN
@KJ7JHN 2 ай бұрын
kzbin.info/www/bejne/hmHLZIdoiZuNaNksi=M9FQXPeTxWKFCC1v
@rubenbartlett2225
@rubenbartlett2225 Жыл бұрын
What question does these 2 essays apply to? Is it just the general/personal essay?
@KJ7JHN
@KJ7JHN 2 ай бұрын
Need to add water to your flowers. They almost fell over. 😅
@kadirimariamdamilola9905
@kadirimariamdamilola9905 Жыл бұрын
Please can I submit my essay for review but not have it included in the video
@carlahau698
@carlahau698 Жыл бұрын
yipeeee manifesting
@grahamkwaker3584
@grahamkwaker3584 Жыл бұрын
Let’s seeeee
@r22gamer54
@r22gamer54 6 ай бұрын
what colleges did they get into?
@chinar_talks
@chinar_talks Жыл бұрын
Hey, how can I connect you to use your essay checking service?
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool Жыл бұрын
visit our website! www.elevated.school/editmyessay
@samihaislam5070
@samihaislam5070 Жыл бұрын
Can we send supplemental essays then?
@greggoreo6738
@greggoreo6738 2 ай бұрын
Great work. Respectfully Yours Gregg Oreo Long Beach CA États Unis
@Prometheus--
@Prometheus-- Жыл бұрын
good morning y'all
@kazishahjalal6852
@kazishahjalal6852 Жыл бұрын
Anyone can help me please. Can I use rhetoric questions in my common app essay?
@dide-g7k
@dide-g7k Жыл бұрын
yes!!
@thatUni-guy
@thatUni-guy Жыл бұрын
I also have a family based essay
@swayampathak4273
@swayampathak4273 2 ай бұрын
i thought this was kevin leonardo
@HeavenlySunset24
@HeavenlySunset24 2 ай бұрын
Wait… so what was the best essay you’ve read so far?
@kazishahjalal6852
@kazishahjalal6852 Жыл бұрын
Can anyone please tell me whether fictional essay is allowed in common app or not? Different people are saying different things. 😊
@GabrielleWatry
@GabrielleWatry 2 ай бұрын
🎉
@orbit5311
@orbit5311 Жыл бұрын
Is it possible to submit my essay for advice but not have it included in a video?
@jiwoorhee9778
@jiwoorhee9778 Жыл бұрын
He says then pay him
@visionaryscenario
@visionaryscenario Жыл бұрын
Do you review common app essay for free?
@ethelyntaylor6349
@ethelyntaylor6349 8 ай бұрын
Is this 500 words
@gobelfury
@gobelfury 5 ай бұрын
Can you edit mine?
@elevatedschool
@elevatedschool 5 ай бұрын
Sure! Keep an eye out for when we start asking for requests!
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