Rhyming Picture Book Critique: Alien Verbs from OUTER SPACE! | Peek & Critique

[@sanshagoddard4452]

Another great video. Thank you Renee.

[@amyansara9381]

I love your suggestions for this!!! Definitely love “shot” from the stars!

[@clairefreeland]

Renee, thanks so much for this mini-lesson. Interesting, helpful, and fun, fun, fun!

[@mr2darcy]

Fun poem and great insight, my friend! One other thing I noted is the use of "just" twice. In the quote, it makes sense, but in the 3rd stanza it feels more like a filler word. Also, this feels more dactylic than anapestic (not that it matters), although whatever meter it is, it is fairly consistent - which is good!

[@sarahathertonchildrensauth9332]

So helpful. It all makes perfect sense when you go through it like this, Renee. Thank you.

[@LyricalLanguageLab]

I'm so glad you find it helpful, Sarah!

[@Skeazix]

I love this poem. Also, Renee - I get so much value out of listening to you do this. I heard about you from Julie Headland's 12x12 Picture Book Challenge. Thank you for sharing your insight with all us would-be rhymers!

[@LyricalLanguageLab]

You are so welcome! I'm so pleased you find the videos helpful. :)

[@chadsimmons4496]

I am struggling to find a second rhyme for fierce in my WIP. (Other than pierce)… It comes at the end of a line too, so I can’t cheat with a blend. Maybe I need an alien verb! Thanks for the video. Edit: Grobaccos might work instead of Grobobites.

[@Jyly1]

Will you be doing more videos?

[@LyricalLanguageLab]

Yes, I have some planned and coming up!