What Lurks Outside the Door [MLP Grimdark Reading]

[@Kuromii_Waddles]

Pardon me for saying this, but it just occurred to me that this whole story could have been resolved if Sunny had just bought some good ear plugs. X'DD

[@carolinecheney]

But the creature would have still gotten in.

[@johnynoway9127]

​@@tomasprodal1203im pretty sure equestria has no soldiers that are trained propperly. Because if they were they wouldnt always get caught (or killed if it wasnt a kids show)

[@ryleejam]

Or when hiding she opened a window to trick the creature thinking that she managed to escape

[@jennahuckleberry]

“She did not have the bits to buy a new house” Yeah if that was me, I would have said F it and slept on the streets near a bunch of people.

[@heavenlydiscorded4495]

*tap tap tap* she heard taping as the door "who is it" she ask with no reply. she slowly opened the door looking out it looking at a tall ugly monster as it spoke thus "my name is jeff"

[@Mistymorning614]

Dark gamer rofl my hello my name is Jeff from the overwatch community rofl

[@lekatte]

"My name is Jeff. Oh, sorry about your guards, they tried to kill me. But, I'm here to talk about your houses extended warranty."

[@jaiden5941]

Not two minutes into this story, I already had the sinking feeling the entity was actually inside the house the entire time! Being a GrimDark story rather than a darkfic, I know this will not end well...

[@AJponyAPschannel]

Good reading :) Story itself was good, but felt it held back a bit by being a one-shot. Though for what it is it was a good psychological horror

[@CapeBretonCryptid]

You're one of my favorite narrators! Love your work and the atmosphere of the video!

[@jamese9812]

Wow, that was intense. Splendid job man, I look forward to this coming month for more beautiful nightmares

[@destiny8794]

You have the perfect gravely voice to be telling horror stories, great job, I loved it! :)

[@Sparrow9642]

Lol, that gravely voice actually was killing me real voice, the more updated voice on the more recent readings is my actual narration voice XD

[@destiny8794]

@@Sparrow9642 Why force your voice that low if it hurts then? Still loved the video and subscribed :)

[@Sparrow9642]

@@destiny8794 I was mimicking another voice, but eventually I met the right people and started doing things correctly. I was kinda not aware of all of the aspects of narration at the time, and the only real thing I did, was talk in a raspier voice than my usual one. My voice is naturally deep in a midrange, so I wasn't necessarily killing my vocal cords, but if I hadn't changed, my voice would've been impacted massively over time. Thank you for the subscription btw! Helps me a ton!

[@raymondmccoy5975]

19:30 "Never stopped." What, exhaling! Damn

[@echowolf8741]

This sent a chill up my spine I love it!

[@josephrenshaw5609]

i want this to have a animation and the creature doing the tpose position during the whole animation

[@zapcraftihoof8318]

I feel like this creature is a combination of Slenderman and Darkness

[@pkhydro2895]

Nice job, PK. Listening to creepypastas at 10 at night. I'm gonna lock my door now. The spookums can feel free to stay the fuck out of my life.

[@princeramblerose]

I put the sequence of taps and scratches into Morse code and it loosely translates to “shush”. hm

[@Sparrow9642]

Fitting for what the story represents lol

[@archeishere1]

Maybe the Monster hates her music, no wonder he wanted to "shush" her.

[@CJArts_main]

Wow! You are a great Narrator! Are you friends with TheLostnarrator?

[@Sparrow9642]

Thankies! Yes, Lost and I are friends, though we don't talk at all. I hope to meet her at my local con this year though!

[@katelynbodiford5680]

@@Sparrow9642 I bet the creature outside is Rake.

[@somethinginthewoods2662]

@@katelynbodiford5680 the description fit very much.

[@thepoetoffall7820]

So, I have a question. Why did this need to be about a pony? I mean it changed literally nothing about the story, other than to add a layer of separation between it and us.

[@Sparrow9642]

The Poet Of Fall Lol good point, but it was on Fimfiction, stories based around MLP

[@revaslatts8011]

That's a good question.

[@Flowerbarrel]

Hahah. Nice. At least a few times a month at night I’ll hear something scratching at my window. At least once a squirrel was trying to get in. That time was fine, because I think he just wanted sunflower seeds. The other times though I just ignore it. I haven’t been horribly murdered by a whozit from the wilderness yet!

[@tbizzleandfriends4994]

Poor sunny was trapped in the rubber room :(

[@archeishere1]

Monster:*Tap Tap Tap* Me: *Prepares Shotgun* Well here's a Message from me to the door and to you! BANG BANG BANG

[@clairewiley9720]

There goes my sleep

[@vipeizoid]

Boi get some sage, salt, and good earplugs.

[@continuousvariable1220]

I thought that the taping and scratching was Morse code at the start

[@coconow1]

I'm not getting any sleep tonight...

[@thelastcatwing8161]

You know what i hered this and affter i heered tapping at my window but nothing was there

[@maxellis3813]

My friend, Breezy, has been telling me about how she hears tapping at her trailer door at night but had stopped recently I ain't sleeping either...

[@gummyninja9599]

its the rake :D

[@teenfoe]

It's The Rake.

[@Enter_the_Toshiverse_1996]

So...the monster in this story was basically the Rake? 🤔

[@brookeburch9966]

I was listening to this and my dogs tail tapped my door and it scared me

[@roxy2334]

Hold on, what this? The rake? No? I’ll stop.

[@matthewc3142]

The take is there but will you read this do you feel like you are being watched

[@kixad6882]

The description of the creature reminded me of a preying mantis. .....GIANT PREYING MANTIS

[@katelynbodiford5680]

AnonaMask I bet it's The Rake.

[@matthewc3142]

Rake

[@katelynbodiford5680]

@@matthewc3142 Yep it's Rake.

[@koopaking6148]

I'm only at the 1st 7 minutes or so but this would be a perfect discourd fan fiction... Spoilers The description of the creature makes me think of a mlp version of the rack...

[@dustyrose192]

I was thinking slenderman

[@calebboudreaux5144]

Love it more more

[@charjohn2468]

She gone to the nutbun

[@megeepicgamertothemax7223]

Omg.,....................IT'S THE RAKE

[@river-rayrandall9794]

If I hear a tap tap tap then scratch on the door I would make a spear and hide if I then go to school and we have to spend the night I will lock every door and hide

[@thedragonsflame7869]

Fine community? She's in a insane asylum.

[@maxellis3813]

Oh hell nah!! I share my Wattpad account with my friend named Sunny!!

[@RAC00NFANGIRL]

Poor sunny.

[@thedragonsflame7869]

A spell gun?

[@mumyratsweed723]

After the 'spell gun' part I couldn't cope!

[@leonasnake]

Why didnt she stay with a bandmate until it was figured outttt

[@gerynmccollum8202]

The rake?

[@megeepicgamertothemax7223]

Geryn Mccollum I was thinking that as well.

[@katelynbodiford5680]

Mege epic gamer to the max I bet it really is The Rake.

[@matthewc3142]

R he take it will kill her and eat her probly

[@archeishere1]

maybe it was the shy guy in scp

[@thelastcatwing8161]

There are two things that good do this they are scp 096 or the rake

[@javelingreenstone1212]

These are exact what this makes me think of.

[@boxoknox]

Is it the rake???

[@zeltheelitebloodgulch674]

Just hand me an M4A1 and a portal to Equestria I’ll deal with it

[@bendywithsunglasses4178]

Who is sunnyglade?

[@Sparrow9642]

cuphead fandom trash It's an OC character created by the author

[@katelynbodiford5680]

@@Sparrow9642 I wonder what she looks like her name is cute.

[@lyson_rose]

What if the creature wanted a friend and only knew how to by forcing itself to somepony. :(

[@archeishere1]

is it the shy guy from scp

[@archeishere1]

So it's SCP Doorman but more violent version

[@Mistymorning614]

First this Was interested secound it is 2 in the morning and I'm alone wow I'm a genius

[@neotunesx]

But, once he was inside the house, and going into her room, couldn't she have jumped out the window?

[@davidbros3462]

Justin Seagull Stole Jimin's Jams it was boarded

[@neotunesx]

David Bros OO right 😂 I’m such an idiot. Thanks ^^

[@katelynbodiford5680]

@@neotunesx She was also probably frozen in fear.

[@generalarcticfox6406]

Hypotheses or theory dont know wich you do first- whatever this creture is maby is a mental and reality creture that could kill people aggressively with the guards or mental destroy them to kill themselves with this pony and I'm not fully sure if it eather can only be met by only being in this town or it can free rome

[@anthonyrausch5708]

SLENDER-PONY!!!!! 🦄🦄🦄🦄🦄🦄

[@PyroLeo]

A mutant human